Wow, Mister M. You got me teary-eyed. That scene where little Abbie looks around and sees her family, unsure of why they aren't moving...man, I'm such a softie for little kids.

It appears as though Abby's tour through the country with John Michael is coming to an end (thankfully). And you've left us with quite a tease for the next chapter - I'm quite eager to see what comes of this savior, and how Abby gets out of this horrible situation.

Man, what a trip you've been taking us on. Simply fantastic!
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...Abby is back at John Michael's "Old Homestead," and matters and memories get more complicated...read and enjoy!

Sir O, the tour through the country is coming to an end, but not necessarily thankfully! She still had much to suffer...and I'm glad the Abbie scene still affects; it's been a very long time since I'd composed it the first time, and I simply dusted it off...
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As always Mister M, a great update!

You were right. Seems there's still more to Abbey's nightmare, but at least now she has a little kindness shown to her. And about time, too - I've felt so bad for the poor girl, she really needed a break. It was also great to see the aftermath of Walton's evil through the eyes of Trickle, that really added to the effect. Still depressed over that, by the way

Very chilling conclusion with that insight into Judah's mind, too. I wonder if we're about to see a totally new Walton/Ben Russell character soon?
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As we learn more of Abby's captivity... most interesting. I'll keep following along...
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Great update, Mr. M!

This story of yours is getting more and more interesting as the little details of what happned to Abby are coming to light.

And now with the shoot apparently over soon, I guess Ben is bursting to come out now, and the real horror will begin (again).

You're keeping me suspense as always!
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Your stories have always been confusing with the wrting set up--so many changing scenes and Girls Lost is one of the most confusing to follow. but plot wise still ok.
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...bout of the Mistoffelees 2009 Curse, which left me on my back for a good two weeks, I'm back with Chapter 14 of Little Girls Lost , in which Abby goes through one "Valley of the Shadow" and another one seems about to be readied...read and enjoy!

Sir O, you'll see that it was Mack's action that helped bring the whole Walton episode to its conclusion. And as far as Judah and Ben...let's just say that Judah can't really take much more of what he's been doing...

Milady Deanna, you can bet that Abby's old adventure is about to get mixed up with a whole new one...

Ashley, dear heart, your batter's eye for Ben has served you well again...

Amandalu, part of what is confusing is the frame-story format I chose for this, in which Abby and others tell their parts of the story of the original abduction (which was the source of the movie being filmed in the frame portion of the story) while the outer frame of the movie and Ben Russell's new murders take place. I used direct quotes to set off the interior portions from the frame portions, but I'm thinking that perhaps using a different font or using some other sort of stylistic change, such as italic, would better separate the frame from the interior. As far as the plot. I'll readily admit that I don't pay as much attention to my plots as I do my characters...
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It's not just that story--it's all your stories. Especially your Family Feud on TUGs great plot great development of characters but increasingly strainuous to read. It's like throwing seven to eight books into one story with jumps here and there.

Little Girls Lost was a ok attempt. Your other stories were a tinger better--especially the Camp ones. But still a pain to read.

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Goodness, I really grew to like Sally Jane! As the only bit of light in poor Abby's life during her ordeal, you can't help but love her childish innocence in the midst of the terrible situation that surrounds her. Ignorant to Walton's intents, happy when she sees that her ropes aren't painful, AND she has a stuffed bear!

That bit with Abby in the beginning, shouting at the director...you go girl. What a scumbag. I've also got a feeling that things with Judah are about to skyrocket, though I hope I'm wrong
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Your slow build to the climax is like a noose slowly tightening (in the twisted spirit of your story).

I, for one, like the back and forth of Abby's passages in her book with what's occuring at the shoot. The differences of perspectives gives the reader a better insight of the emotions, both real and fictitious.

And I can tell that someone is going to fall victim to the Babydoll killer very soon.
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What you all seem to like is everything here--as if all structures and plots are perfect.

As isaid, the plot is great but the structure is mind wrecking.
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Well, Amandalulu is entitled to her opinion, but I agree with Darial. I'm very much enjoying the tale of "Silly Little Girls Lost", and how Mr. M is taking us inside the minds of the participants ... and most especially, the hero, John Michael Walton, a true role model that all should emulate.

--Lars
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I'm also enjoying the story, for different reasons ... with characters like Walton, it may be time for the Lord of the Dark to pay a visit to Snowden.

Nice work, Mr. M; hoping to see more soon.
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Well, Amandalulu is entitled to her opinion, but I agree with Darial. I'm very much enjoying the tale of "Silly Little Girls Lost", and how Mr. M is taking us inside the minds of the participants ... and most especially, the hero, John Michael Walton, a true role model that all should emulate.

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Dangit Lars, why does your dark humor always crack me up...?
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I can never post here as often as I intend to, but the stories continue to impress. I'm still reading, even if I'm not always commenting.
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You captured Sally Jane's innocence very well in relation to the unspeakable terror of her brother. The Walton's are certainly one strange family (unlike their television counterpart).

Events are really winding down for the enivitable conclusion, but not too quickly though as I'm really savoring every detail in your latest masterpiece.

Special Agent Spencer has nice ring to it...
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...that's all I want right now...

Anyway, here's Chapter 15 of Little Girls Lost , in which "A Dark and Stormy Night" backons the beginning of the story's catastrophe. Read and enjoy!

Lars, you might want to check with John Michael to see how that "hero" turned out...

Lord Usikujumba, your Lord of the Dark would probably like it in Snowden--maybe he really will come out and play...

Milady Deanna, you just have to make allowances for Celebrity Guest Villains...

Sir O, maybe he cracks you up because he's already cracked himself...

Mulder, glad to see you here--I'm about to get back to Fire Team Charlie as soon as I can find time to reply...

Ashley, dear heart, Sally Jane had a really distinct part to play in the original drama, especially as I had revised the original tale. Innocence and depravity raised in the same house, you know...and I thought you might like teh ring of Special Agent Spencer--Calico did too...
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Judah/Ben is finally making his move now...
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One of the best things about coming back to this forum after my little sabbatical has been catching up with events in Snowdon. It’s been an absolute joy these past few months reading about snoops old and new. I can’t believe how much the girls have grown in my absense, why little Abbie and Serenity (still my all-time favourite snoops) must be older now than Trish was in your first story! And what’s more there’s a whole new generation of Junior snoops ready to take their place with the likes of Charity Suzie and Destiny already earning their stripes.

Snowdon must be one hell of a place to raise your daughters, I can’t help imagining expectant mothers in the town praying for that extra Y-chromosome, so they won’t have to endure the stress of having a snoop in the family.

I think I’ve experienced every emotion going reading through your stories, I’ve cheered the girls on, fretted anxiously over their safety, laughed at their more crazy exploits and even shed a tear or two (mostly for poor little Abbie Faith, oh the heartache that poor girl has been through in her short life) and now I find myself gripped by your latest tale.

Little Girls Lost is proving to be every bit as gripping as the original LGL (a story that still brings a lump to my throat even now) and the fact that it is also a sequel to one of my favourite Lila Spencer stories is just the icing on the cake - I love the way you blend the supernatural elements with the everyday, it makes everything so much more believable.

And i'm not finding the shift in narrative confusing at all. I'm quite used to non-linear storytelling both in literature and film, so it's all water off a ducks back to me (or Maybe it's because i've read the orignal so i have a broad understanding of what happened before)

But now I find myself in the awful position of actually having to wait for the next instalment, I really don’t know if I can stand it, I’m going to be a nervous wreck waiting to see what has happened to Molly & Shawna. Could Ben/Judah really harm them? Even (God forbid) kill them? Or are they just pawns to get to Abbie and Abby? Either way I certainly wouldn’t want to be them right now.
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...a new chapter, in which Ben Russell tried to "Out-Herod Herod," or John Michael Walton, as the case may be...read and enjoy, but be warned that this chapter is a very...well, let's just say that Ben is very much Ben, shall we?...

Ashley, dear heart, Ben is surely making his move indeed--I just hope you can stomach it...

Moxx, old bean, you're quite right about Abbie and Serenity--they're heading into seventh grade, while Trish and her little crew were in sixth grade when we first met them in the Prequel and Snatched Sitters . And now Trish and her gang are seniors...I have one last case for them before Snowden State calls them, but at this rate it'll take forever to get it written!

Moxx, you sound like you knew your way around the old Abductor site--in which case, you know the antecedents from which I arose...and maybe a few things about some of the more solid denizens of Snowden that might be of some concern...
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...I have up the last two chapters of Little Girls Lost , in which Abbie faces Judah/Ben and, to borrow again from Shakespeare, "My Voice is in my Sword." Finally, with the traditional "Exeunt Omnes" the story comes to its conclusion. Clearing the way for another related tale from a very talented author...

Apropos of another string up in the General Chatter section, I reiterate what I've at least suggested before--that if the material of this tale, or any other for that matter, is too troubling for you, then don't read it. I warned everyone at the very start of this tale that much of it would be very dark, and that wasn't just for show--I know many of us here don't enjoy dark tales, and that was my warning to be chary of Little Girls Lost . Certainly I could have made it much more gruesome than even it was--more emphasis on the details of Judah/Ben's attacks, for example--but I didn't want to tread too boldly over the boundaries of what is good taste here. Besides, the best horror is horror painted by the audience's imagination...

In any case, the thing is done. I wanted to hearken back to events which were only hinted at in the early tales of my Snowden Snoop opus--as far back as Snatched Sitters --and some of my next tales will also recall several events from the early Snowden days as Trish and crew's high-school Snooping days dwindle to a close. Mostly, they should not be very dark in tone--at least as dark as the now-concluded tale...
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Excellent Mr M, can't wait to see how this story wraps up

Here in the UK it's illegal to carry a knife yet little Abbie Faith is walking around with not one but two lethal samurai swords (one of which is seemingly as big as she is) and no-one bats an eyelid. I know you American's have a much more relaxed view of weapon ownership than we do over here but wow! I am shocked that someone as young as her is allowed to carry such deadly blades. I keep thinking someone should really say something....
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